lol didn't have that many votes anyway so I suppose I'm not breaking any rules.
48 weeks 4 days ago
Randomo (not verified) says:
Your pacing in the beginning is alittle off. Perhaps try to make the laptop have words appear one by one as he says them instead of having them all appear after his mouth flaps like a hundred times.
other than that... Nice! I love how you don't like to waste your time getting your point across.
48 weeks 5 days ago
RayC says:
Sorry for the re-post but I find it imperative that my little blue smiley gets shown.
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Very good points Randomo... RESUBMISSION TIME!!
lol didn't have that many votes anyway so I suppose I'm not breaking any rules.
48 weeks 4 days agoYour pacing in the beginning is alittle off. Perhaps try to make the laptop have words appear one by one as he says them instead of having them all appear after his mouth flaps like a hundred times.
other than that... Nice! I love how you don't like to waste your time getting your point across.
48 weeks 5 days agoSorry for the re-post but I find it imperative that my little blue smiley gets shown.
48 weeks 5 days ago